May 4th, 2013, 2:00 pm

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Reply Wolfie_Inu, May 4th, 2013, 2:03 pm

Die storie beleef tans die simptome van 'n verkorte draaiboek. Aanvanklik sou daar 'n muitery aan boord gewees het om by hierdie punt uit te kom, maar dit sou te lank gevat het en sou van Jane 'n aksie verg wat selfs vir haar net te harteloos is. Hierdie verkorte weergawe van die gebeurtenisse het dalk 'n paar gate in die logika waaraan ek nie tyd gehad het om te dink nie, maar ek's seker my lesers sal my binnekort daarvan inlig ... :P

The story is currently experiencing the symptoms of an abbreviated script. Originally there would have been a mutiny on board to reach this point in the plot, but it would have taken too long and would have required an action from Jane that's just too heartless, even for her. This shortened version of events might have a couple of holes in the logic that I didn't have enough time to think through, but I'm sure my readers will inform me of them soon enough ... :P


Jane: (thinks) No ... / How could I have taken a risk like that? After I was disconnected from the ship's computer so suddenly, my hand-eye coordination must have been off kilter ... I didn't succeed in shooting the grenade from the attacker's hand to let it land in her ship ... / This is my fault!

Alex: Looks like it doesn't bother you to put your crew in danger ... I'll try again ... / Come with me or I'll pump you personally full of lead!
Jane: (thinks) And I only hit her in the shoulder ... and what's more, I dropped my pistol! / Then I don't have a choice ...

Jane: Thank you for waiting for the bridge to be evacuated before you -
Alex: Humph. Looks to me like I care more about the lives of your people than you do ... I'm starting to question our orders to abduct you!

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Reply GabrielsThoughts, May 4th, 2013, 3:05 pm

When will Jane come out of her coma or cryostasis and discover she's been an Om-Ankh all along?

That would be quite a twist.

Reply Wolfie_Inu, May 4th, 2013, 3:23 pm

@GabrielsThoughts: That actually would! :D

Reply Lavabat, May 4th, 2013, 6:29 pm

@GabrielsThoughts: I would like to see that! The look on her face would be priceless. >:3

Reply Lavabat, May 5th, 2013, 8:01 am

@Wolfie_Inu: I also want to see how she would react to finding out that Louwrens was not programed, and not scheming when he saved her life. I imagine she would not take it well.

Reply Wolfie_Inu, May 9th, 2013, 3:58 pm

@Lavabat: I wonder. She might not care, not liking humans either way.

Reply Lavabat, May 9th, 2013, 8:20 pm

@Wolfie_Inu: True. But she might not take the idea that he would not have harmed her well. She would probably be very vocal about how he would have harmed her.

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